Challenge this one. I'm torn on what I think about it.

I like the way that you're not concentrating on the standard portrait of a face, and are pushing the boundary with isolating areas that are normally passed over. Your comment on this highlights it very well. It's a lovely concept, and to be honest, something you excel at. The title is also very clever.

However, it lacks something. My eye drifts around, trying to find a focal point and fails. It sits on the highlighted collar, drifts to the neck and back again. There's just a lack of something to draw me in. Perhaps it's due to the 'straight on' composition - maybe changing the angle will have some effect? (From slightly above and looking down, perhaps)

You can probably guess I like the lighting, because it's something I do myself. The single side source works well, and the shadows are gorgeous...I might even like to see an almost macro shot of the shadowed neck with the details of the skin showing. Perhaps there is too much of the collar showing to work compositionally? I wouldn't know without being there to reframe it though. Plus, being a self-portrait it's a challenge to do these at all...though twisting LCDs make it easier.

I'd love to see it in film too...but that's because I've turned to a black & white film fan. There's just something about noise that I can't not like...but, that's tools at your disposal.

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Thank-you; that comment is worth twenty "nice shot"s.

I'm considering using the picture as part of a graphic, rather than as a stand-alone photograph. Adding text or incorporating it into something bigger (hell knows what, but still) might remedy the compositional problem.

Possibly - there's just something unbalanced at the moment. I'd imagine adding text wouldn't do much, but incorporating 'into something bigger' holds some ideas.

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i can't really add much to ceri's comment, but i agree about the slight lack of focal point. also, delta 100 is THE best B/W film anywhere, ever.

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First thing first - this photo most definitely needs a border. Especially when body parts are leaving the frame does a photo need a border. I'd play around with some different styles and see what's good. Other than that, what Ceri said.

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